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First off, I love the idea behind the idea of the design and the elements you placed to surrport that, Like the wings for example. However there are a few details that can be fixed, like the eye. The eye's placement is to far forward and should be more towards the cheek. Also the horses eye should be parallel to the head position. Furthermore the inner back leg should be moved more to the right, so the horse doesn't look like it trapping. One other thing is that even though you don't have a background you should at least have a directional source of lighting instead of an undefined and inconstant lighting. The wings need fixing too, I think with more structure and making them big enough to carry the horses weight when he flys they will be perfect. I recommend you use a reference for the wings. But, overall the artist does show a good command over horse anatomy, and has nice movement going though the figure of the horse. I also enjoyed the pic and can't wait to see the finished product. Keep it up

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=Candrence Apr 23, 2009, 1:30:35 PM

I have been looking through tutorials on wings lately and recently did a very detailed set of wings on "Chase the Wind" project, but I later discovered a mistake that I used the wrong tutorial when I went to start drawing, so the wings on that horse are technically upside-down,

. But, it is kinda hard to find a reference for a tree for a wing, lmao. I'm comfortable with the wing size because I don't want my [crappy] wings to overtake the picture.

As far as the horse anatomy is concerned, I'll admit that I might need to fix the rear hooves from the pastern down, but other than that, I was using a reference picture to get the pose and angle right - [link]

And yes, I am still trying to get the lighting right. But, I'm not too focused on a main light source because I plan to use this as part of a long series of unique pegasus "coats" to be used for an online horse simulation game, which only allows the showcase of the horse, never backgrounds; transparent.

But, thank you very much for my first thoughtful critique,

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=toshema Apr 23, 2009, 1:37:21 PM

Your very welcome!!! I hope you find it useful and if like me to crit you again you are welcomed to ask anytime!!

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